③ 通过合句，将意义相关的几个句子，用一定的连接方法连接起来，或通过紧缩，去掉一些多余的成分可以避免冗长累赘，松散无力，使句子凝练，层次清晰。

The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street. It is not far from Jianxin Chinese School.

修改后：The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School. (全国卷)

④ 尝试改变句子的开头方式，不要一味地都是主语开头，接着是谓语、宾语，最后再加一个状语。要灵活运用诸如倒装句、强调句、主从复合句、分词状语等，这样能增加文章的节奏和韵律美。

We met at the school gate and went there together early in the morning.

修改后：Early in the morning we met at the school gate and went there together. (全国卷)

五、思想性

新标准对写作的要求，增加了情感因素，要求在准确流畅表达写作要点的同时，适当增加句子的感情色彩，增加一些人情味，使文章读起来更亲切，完全达到与读者进行交流的目的。如：

Do you think you’ll like it? If not, I can try and find another flat for you. (全国卷) 表现了作者对朋友尽职尽责的心情，回信由此充满浓厚的感情色彩。

六、使作文“形神都不散”

汉语作文要求“形散，神不散”，而英语作文则要求“形不散，神也不散”。“形”即文章的句子，“形不散”即句与句之间要连贯，句式有变化。“神”即文章中心，“神不散”即围绕一个中心而写。

(1) 如何使英语作文“形”不散

① 使用连词、副词、过渡词语，使句与句之间连贯。

② 使用多种句式，使句子有变化。

(2) 如何使英语作文“神不散”

“神不散”的有效办法之一是把握主题句。首先确定文章中心，每段列出一句主题句，由主题句反映文章中心；其次对每段的主题句进行展开，可以由若干个分句来支持主题句。

下面以上海某年的高考书面表达题为例：请你谈谈轿车大量进入家庭后，对家庭、环境和经济可能产生的影响。

Now more and more families have their own cars. It has advantages. It’s very convenient for the people who have their own cars to go to work or to take their children to school. On holidays, all the families can travel to some place or go to visit an exhibition far away by car. They save a lot of their spare time. The car industry is developing more and more rapidly because people need more and more cars. With the development of the car industry, the economy in China is developing rapidly too.

But a lot of problems are coming about. Traffic in cities is getting heavier and heavier. The car is causing more pollution. To solve these problems, something must be done.

此篇书面表达的中心“轿车进入家庭后所产生的影响”，由两个主题句 It has advantages 和 A lot of problems are coming about 体现出来。为了进一步展开主题句 It has advantages，文章从convenience, saving time and developing car industry and economy 三方面加以论证；为了展开主题句 A lot of problems are coming about，文章从 traffic 和 pollution 两方面加以说明。这样利用主题句使文章层层相扣，形不散，神也不散，文章读起来朗朗上口，生动有趣。

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